Dan: This is coming along nicely. It's a bit rough around the edges in terms of tone, but the subject matter and focus is terrific, and your comfortable way of speaking makes this an engaging speech. Great start.
Volume: Clear and easy to hear you. Pace: I like how natural this is. I know you have a plan and some notes, but you seem quite spontaneous and in-the-moment. You start and stop, as you would if you were really having a conversation. Nice. Tone: a few small problems here. In several places, you slip into "up-speak," where you allow your voice to rise up in pitch us if you're asking a question...when you're not really asking a question. I know that this is a hard habit to break...but it's one worth trying to break. Engagement: you're very engaging here. You talk about yourself in an honest way, and this engages us.
See if you can get rid of the up-speak stuff. Otherwise, you're in great shape here.
Dan: This is coming along nicely. It's a bit rough around the edges in terms of tone, but the subject matter and focus is terrific, and your comfortable way of speaking makes this an engaging speech. Great start.
ReplyDeleteVolume: Clear and easy to hear you.
Pace: I like how natural this is. I know you have a plan and some notes, but you seem quite spontaneous and in-the-moment. You start and stop, as you would if you were really having a conversation. Nice.
Tone: a few small problems here. In several places, you slip into "up-speak," where you allow your voice to rise up in pitch us if you're asking a question...when you're not really asking a question. I know that this is a hard habit to break...but it's one worth trying to break.
Engagement: you're very engaging here. You talk about yourself in an honest way, and this engages us.
See if you can get rid of the up-speak stuff. Otherwise, you're in great shape here.
Grade so far: 45/50